Yakayak ek sawal
Rakha gaya mere aage
"Bata ae bande!
Teri aakhri raza kya hai?"
Chaunk ke maine
Khud hi se poochha
"Aakhri? Itni jaldi?
Ya allah! Meri sazaa kya hai?"
Bojhil sannaton ke palon mein
Man daud raha tha yahan wahan
Ki tabhi ek bar fir maine
Wahi sawal suna dobara...
"Bol ae bande! Kya hai jo,
Tu apne jiwan se chahta hai?
Palkein sada ko girane se pehle
Kis manzil tak chahta hai jana?"
Ek pal ko sab kuch tham gaya fir
Maine mud ke apni zindagi ko dekha
Nazar, akeli, arth-heen, be-maksad
Aur usi kshan nikla mooh se jawab
"Bahut si chhoti-chhoti cheezein...
Ek boond paani
Ek lamha pyar
Aur Ek katra vishwas
Ek pal ki shanti
Ek chain ki saans
Ghadi bhar ka saath
Ek shaant muskaan
Ek khushi ka daan
Ek gham ka nidan
Ek rasta anjaan
Ek...pehchaan."
Dheemi si muskaan ke sath
Mujhe diya gaya jawab...
"Chhoti chhoti cheezon mein ae bande
Tune maang liya sara jahaan!
Aj tak kyon nahi ki thi koshish
Ab tak soya tha kya, insaan?
Chal, jaa jee le kuch aur pal
Kar le poore apne armaan!"
Muthhi mein ek sagar thama ke
Mujhe mera rasta dikha ke
Dekar aur ek mauka, farishta woh mera
Gayab yoon hua, ki nazar bhi na aya...
Ek pal ko thamke, fir maine mudke
Muskarati zindagi apni se kaha
"Tune mujhe ek naam ek wajood diya tha kabhi
Aj tera karz utaarne ka samay hai aya!"
P.S. I didn't type in "Hindi" for it was perceived as tougher to read(!) last time. Need a review on this count.
22 comments:
seems ur gonna die soon.. anyways
I have tried reading this twice..
im sorry to say..
either its OHT or
UFT..
whatever be the case i find it, as u call it, crap.
1."Bojhil sannaton ke palon mein
Man daud raha tha yahan wahan"
I thot u said u were female..
anyways...
2.
"
Ek pal ki shanti
Ek chain ki saans
Ghadi bhar ka saath
Ek shaant muskaan
Ek khushi ka daan
Ek gham ka nidan
Ek rasta anjaan
Ek...pehchaan."
arre ?? yeh kya baat huvi ??
last lines kuch zabardasti rhyme see hai
3.pakki senseless
i dont know... but I think you have to praise also when u comment..
so..
"except these 3 points it was awesome.."
sorry.. im a bad liar
I said it's crap
it's not meant to be praised
i just wrote it arbitly, I was feeling very arbit, and posted it because it's my blog, i can do that. Of crse, u have full right to post any comment u want.
and yes, I shall die soon. u shd be happy.
thanx for callin it crap though.
1.ganda pj, extremely ganda, even by ur level
2.the only rhyme scheme in this poem is a-b-c-d-e-f-g-d
Throughout
local rhymin is coincidental, or cheap attempt at rhythm, or i dunno-wat.
3. not reqd.
disqualified.
Wat's the point in lyin mani?
well somehow i liked the thiking behind it....haan zindagi mein essentially hamien yahi chotti-2 cheezein chahiye hoti hain..lk "shanti", "muskan" et al..par kya karoon koi bhi nahi milti :P
lolz just kidding..on a serious not i guess yeh last cheez pehchaan ke liye hi poori zindagi beet jaati hai :)
PS: plz yaar change "Kon" to "Kon ??" :P thx :)
abay i asked..
whats the realtion bw an anjaan rastaa and a pehchaan.
the point in lyin is u wont feel bad
As...
my being happy with your death.. (as u say, i really cant decide now)
shows how disappointed you are with my comment...
I loved this one ... seems as good as Tanha.
@AFF
Wats wrong with ur choice?:O
@CK
oho..why make an issue outa everything.
Ek rasta anjaan and ek pehchaan are two separate requirements...both important.
I hope u undrstand the importance of the concept of identity, and of crse that of an unexplored path for ur life.
Deide soon.
@Kon"??"
1. i'm too lazy, give me a few days:P
2.thnx for visitin
3. i hope u get one of ur miss shanti/muskaan etc soon
4. agree with the pehchaan count
5. thank god! at lst someone noticed the thinking:D
Nothing ... i happen to like some of the "crap" that you dish out, that's all.
dekh teri fat gayi!
thats why u have to praise
1. okk i can allow u to do tht after ur exams :)
2. i guess we can now leave this mutual thankfulness :P
3. i too actually hope tht i get one of those :)
4. agreed :)
5. thank god ? arey thanks me :P :D ;)
@ The latest Czar...
:O
I didn't expect any such strong comments..
Even if u follow 'colorful Keeda's; policy of the point in lyin is u wont feel bad
, that doesnt justify that much praise for an extremely random composition. Infact it's randomness is the proof that i've written it...so u better not doubt its' authenticity!
:D
Pls do not delve into contexts and implications....we anyway don't have much control over things!
You really enjoy your state of insanity,don't you:D
Yes I do. I like to enjoy most things I do, or am forced to do.
If u can always do what u enjoy, start enjoying what u do remains my funda of life...
Insanity and me are inseparable, I am insane, and I love it.
Nice words as usual!!
wud have preferred it in hindi as usual!!
Gratitude to you, as usual!
A little bit of both....
I'm kinda sinkin...
I was told several times earlier,that I shd put hindi compositions in hindi script.
However, when I DID that for "Nazar"ppl complained readin hindi was even tougher in our SMS-loving world.
And anyway, it IS far more inconvenient typin it out. Plus I use HTML based hindi script rather than unicode, which means u cant read it properly in Mozilla.
After the exmas, if I post anything inhindi, I'll try and use hindi script.
Till then, if I do, pls be content(or just bunk it) with roman script.
@Prad
Nah..it was me...and my kinda crap.
A post better skipped
@Kon..
Done that..i'm not that lazy:P
And ya, thank you!
I told ya, didn't I?
Stop thinkin sweety, except maybe about.......
And stop calling your writings crap! They're the only things I love more than...
may be its ridiculous ...and senseless
isiliye mujhe achha laga...
best among all ur poems (maine abhi tak jeetne padhe hai).
i read it twice and this time not becoz of the fact that i ddnt get it in the first time...
#if someone ask for something doesnot mean that is an accusation
ok ok, wont say gaain that it was an accusation, but aj kal sab meri poems padke unhe un-original kehne lagte hain
:(((((
not fair:(((
had hai!
anyway, ab is poem ne mujhe confuse kar diya hai
kisi ke bilkul OHT jati hai, aur koi keh raha hai best hai:O:O:O:O:O
main dono mein se kisi se 100% agree nahi karti
anyway, chalo bhav, tumhe meri koi poem samajh to aayi
:P
thanx for commentin tho
bye
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