The bed-sheets are crumpled. The pillows are still wet with passion. His distinctive odour pervades in the room. The door is shut, the curtains are drawn, but currently they do not conceal anything. Because there is nothing.
Emptiness.
But, that's only half the truth.
The night mocks at me from outside the window. The lone flickering candle mocks at me from inside. I lay on the floor, unclothed, by the bedside, in waiting; the bed, the clothes, the aroma in the sheets- they all itch against my skin. Every inch of my existence feels incomplete. Shadows from yesterday fall upon my abandoned body. I hate their touch; I blow the candle away.
Darkness.
Everywhere.
The 3 a.m. breeze whistles past the house. It is slightly chilly outside; I am very cold.
It is a silent, serene, peaceful night.
But that's only half the truth.
Emptiness.
But, that's only half the truth.
The night mocks at me from outside the window. The lone flickering candle mocks at me from inside. I lay on the floor, unclothed, by the bedside, in waiting; the bed, the clothes, the aroma in the sheets- they all itch against my skin. Every inch of my existence feels incomplete. Shadows from yesterday fall upon my abandoned body. I hate their touch; I blow the candle away.
Darkness.
Everywhere.
The 3 a.m. breeze whistles past the house. It is slightly chilly outside; I am very cold.
It is a silent, serene, peaceful night.
But that's only half the truth.
27 comments:
i just adore the expression and the entire scenr of the.u will definitely not be getting many good remarks especially from ppl around you but for once i have nothing else to say but "brilliant". it requires a certain amount of skills to write on various topicsand i think you have done the word "talent" justice.i really am surprised to know that you could post sensous posts as well
u've described the scene so vividly. and left a lot for the imagination too!!!
toone kya kar liya taru ??? kya kar liya bata naa!!!!
P.S. I thought guys were perverts!
(calm down bete... calm down)
wow...the post is so beautiful...in a dark kinda way...u really can write in various ways...this 1 is so wonderful...the scene is totally described...but still there's a lot to read between the lines too...keep yp the gr8 writing!!!
w@ anonymous --- if u adore the expression so much, then why dont you have the courage to write your name . Although i know who you are by your distinct style of writing comments .
This is so so sad...when I write something similar (not as beautifully though), I'm branded a pervert. And here you are, being heaped with praise (well-deserved).
Your blog has taken monumental leaps towards candidness, good going.
It's thrilling and scary to visit your blog these days, because one never knows what new frontier you have crossed with disdain.
thats what i call sensible n sensuous PERVERTISM!!!!
my god. I knew tht there was nothing faster then the speed of light .. but tht was HALF TRUTH ... ur imaginations run beyond this galaxy.
And r these posts [ this one & the 2nd last one ] r they inspired due to some hormonal games going inside u ??
newazz nice post yaar. and lol .. lifes a HALF TRUTH .... rest all is hidden in the darkness .. rather we ourselves chooose to hide it.
we choose to hide it :)
:D
u know it really amazes me how someone gets the idea of such kinda posts.i mean wats the logic.
i m not exactly criticizing u but u know fail to understand ur point in writing such posts.
hop u dont mind.
Very sensual. Well written.
@anon
Well, thanx..but coming from u thi praise sounds surprising[;)]..as in i last expected u to praise something like this...thanx anyway..u have the eyes for talent,:P
just kiddin...
@tlc
haan aj kal zyada hi ho raha hai kuch!
dont ask kya![:P]
well..other half ap assume kar sakte ho
thats the idea..to work the imagination...
@brood more
if u liked it...
@ze exaggeratorr!
chill mar yar
it's just a fictional flat piece
aise hi likh diya....
kuch nahi hua mujhe
anyway will get bak to normal postin now..
anyway stop commentin as funnily named anons mr. know-all
@archie
now is that meant to be sarcastic
@.:a:.
thanx!
both the posts are like...well cant say what!!!but opaqueness is better at certain places...anyways great going...
@shalabh
Hey cmon...i think i did write a comment on ur blog saying this..for one, writing something that's creative and honest doesnt brand u a pervert.
and if ppl still do that, let them go to hell..be sure they enjoy ur blogs too!
anyway, u , and at least for this post, vibhor, have been greatly instrumental in increasing the candidness levels on my blog:P
but if that leads to visits from u and comments like this, god i'm pleased!:)
thanx...but that thrill and scary part is a bit hard to digest...
am i being thjat....er...disdainfully pathbreaking:O
u scare me!
@anuj
hehe..yeah imagination, anybody's, is the onlt thing faster!!:D
and no hormones puhleeasssssseeee
it's just..fiction..sadly they have come quick after each other..
@chandu...achha?:P
@shaurya
no i dont mind...i like ur criticism..it's just that everyone has a right to opinion
and this is just a different form of expression....
nobody can decide right or wrong in this world..it's all relative...this was just an expression..needn't be logical..neednt be logical in a way that's understood
baki....chhodo..
:)
im never afraid to let out my identity
so the anonymouse is not me and the know all is not me too...
So teri CHOP!
gr8 post..u seem to leaving a lot for us to read b/w the lines..but cant understand why this sudden upsurge of hormones in you ?
whatz the other half of the truth ?? ;p....kidding
Did u find that sarcastic???oh..wasnt intended to do that....just that this post made me a li'l too kinky!!!
heehee!!
you are showing the signs of a great writer...who can write on anything, as wonderfully as upon the subject that is his/her fav.
Great going...Keep it up
hey...nice one again !!
We all liked the poem...
but thts just half the truth !! [;)]
oye tu naa ek kaam kar, you should write a short story, plot tu mere se le liyo, I have some sq feet free ;)
no seriously, write a short story, it'll be fun
@ck
chateup
@insane,,
fiction honey fiction!
the truth is imagination..use urs!
:P
@archie
hmmm
@goodwill hunting
do i need o explain?
@ravi
thanx
itni tareefon ki varsha!
kya bat hai?
ajkal apne wapas darshan dene shuru kar diye hain yahan
thanx
@spammy
to full truth kya hai?
and who's we?
@romi
waise i have writtn a short story do din pehle but kafi stupid hai
time milega to ek aur likh doongi
plot de
infact, plo hai to y dont u write it urself
hey, i was kiddin with the plot, and btw plot is not everything, thats why i don't try to write it myself.
ps - mani told me you were a typo expert, ha ha ,i don't have any 'PLO'
just got some time out..so i checked your blog...and i wrote what i felt...no exageration...
What a great site
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Incredibly liplicking. This is the best post-sex scenario description I've ever read.
Short...but sensuous
Beautifully expressed!
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