Unko khuda mile jinhe khuda ki hai talaash
Mujhe to bas ek jhalak mere yaar ki mile
Umra dedo unko jinhe jeena hai sau sau saal
Mujhko to bas mutthi bhar pal tere pyar ke mile
Rangeeniyan ye jahaan ki saari, jahaan ko hi mubarak ho
Jahaan muskura de ishq mera, gulshan mere wahin khile
Ek pal se doosre pal tak ji rahe hain hum isi dua mein
Ki kisi ko bhi jahaan mein yoon pal intezaar ke na mile
Aah nikal mere lab se, uske dil tak na pahunche kahin
Aankhein ab bhi hain nam, par hoth hain sile
Unko khuda mile jinhe khuda ki hai talaash
Mujhe to bas ek jhalak mere yaar ki mile...
Mujhe to bas ek jhalak mere yaar ki mile
Umra dedo unko jinhe jeena hai sau sau saal
Mujhko to bas mutthi bhar pal tere pyar ke mile
Rangeeniyan ye jahaan ki saari, jahaan ko hi mubarak ho
Jahaan muskura de ishq mera, gulshan mere wahin khile
Ek pal se doosre pal tak ji rahe hain hum isi dua mein
Ki kisi ko bhi jahaan mein yoon pal intezaar ke na mile
Aah nikal mere lab se, uske dil tak na pahunche kahin
Aankhein ab bhi hain nam, par hoth hain sile
Unko khuda mile jinhe khuda ki hai talaash
Mujhe to bas ek jhalak mere yaar ki mile...
12 comments:
I hope this is just a poem. Too much DARD here. But a nice one. Here's one inspired from your poem:
Ashq jhilmilate hai mere lab par,
tira aks dikhta hai aks me mere.
Tu kaha yeh nahi pata mujhe par,
sirhaane hi rahte hai ab khwaab tere.
Ek pal me zindagi jee lete hai ab,
har pal marte hai intezaar me tere
Kuchh suroor hai is dard me 'gafil'
Ab madhosh hi rehte hai hosh mere.
wisemoron.
really nice one ther...
btw..whom are ya missin so much??
:-)
very nice one..
Ek pal se doosre pal tak ji rahe hain hum isi dua mein
Ki kisi ko bhi jahaan mein yoon pal intezaar ke na mile
You'd find many enjoying the intezaar -
Jo tamanna par na aaye umr bhar.. uski tamanna kijiye!
I found this one really really nice....
Aah nikal mere lab se, uske dil tak na pahunche kahin
Aankhein ab bhi hain nam, par hoth hain sile
But u should acknowledge that 1st line is inspired!
[wisemoron]
you are THE poet man
[aberrant]
ah...
:P
[the introvert]
thanx for the appreciation.
And now thjat you mention it, I think the first line is indeed similar to some verse or some song...I dont know because apparently I have forgotten. Just that 2 days back this line...unko khuda mile jinhe khuda ki hai talash....this much randomly popped in my head, and i made a 2 liner status msg out of it. today i made it into a poem.
but cant remember the source now. maybe i read it somewhere.
I'd acknowledge once i know!!
well, that line is a part of this song from Heer-Ranjha:
ye duniya ye mehfil mere kaam ki nahin (try Google)
Yours is very different and definitely better..
Lovely lines. I remember a couplet from one of my first gazals (it isnt metered):
bemuqaddar chhod gaye hume taqdeer banane waale
Ke aabaad rahein wo taseer banane waale
*taseer = those who are influential,popular
I strongly feel that you should take out some time for gazal/nazm writing. Try and learn some basic behrs. You seem to have adequate talent to be a shair (and mind you, this is a serious comment from my side).
i wud say ..
sabko sab kuch mile :D ..
nd tujhe .. umm .. jhalak tere yaar ki mile :)
tc .
wah wah..bahut badhiya..really fab..itna kise miss kar rahi ho..
I strongly second Tapasya's opinion. Something to seriously consider.
something's wrong . not only can I not write posts , I cant even comment , but yet , a good poem !
[the introvert]
Man you have a memory!
I actually hunted for that song and listened to it to spot the line. dunno form where it had stuck in my mind.
But yeah I acknowlege it is the sane first line..
[tapasya]
Well u can write decently urself..But I dont know how high expectations u hav from me. I just writ some random banter on and off..
[siyaah]
You saying that too..i thought u know much more about gazals and wrting..
[hemu]
ahh..
:-)
[anuj]
Thank you thank you.
[sweet angel]
err..well..bahut zyada log to hain nahi meri zindagi mein miss karne ko :P
[arpz]
Thanx!
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