It rains
I wake up
Drops lash against
the window pane
Beautiful beautiful rain
I smile
The sky lights up
Thunders catch up
quickly from behind
Like heart being followed by the mind
It's dark
and alone
The wind is moist
So are my eyes
Life, perhaps, is still nice.
Shadows lurk
Distorted by the winds
Nothing is definite
Nothing is secure
Neither are left with me desires any more.
Just me
Just the rain
The darkness fighting
the noisy thunders in the night
And a blank, a smile, a blank, a smile.
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Like heart being followed by the mind
The darkness fighting
the noisy thunders in the night
Liked these lines. The poem sounds like a pause on a hilltop.
nice title :D
It's dark
and alone
The wind is moist
So are my eyes
Life, perhaps, is still nice.
fantastic lines!!! just loved them!!!!
Bangalore and the rain and wind accompanying it have given me this emotion a lot many times!!!!
...The wind is moist
So are my eyes...
Usually the rain carries that moisture away, in all senses.
[v]
Exactly my feeling while writing...a brief halt in the middle of exhilaration.
[doc]
:)
[eagle]
Thanks, feels good when smbdy identifies by an abstract u barely manage to put in vague words.
[akshay]
Not always. Rain can bring pain too,esp as memories.
Dunno if I'm sounding shallow but Delhi mein rain aur uspar se sad?? Chalo bombay mein baadh aaye to rona banta hai but in Delhi, anything <> the ruthless summer or winter is welcome :) !
some historic day it is....lady with words leaves "blank" as a title :P
Nostalgia creeps in about rainy days, but alas!no rain where i am! :(
surreal, simple, soothing and slightly sad..
(I know these words conflict with one another, but I'd associate each one of them with this poem.)
Life, perhaps is nice.
The key word there, Perhaps.
Nice poem, its raining outside when I write this.
thunder fights darkness as I write this.
A blank a smile, a blank, a smile ,and then just blankness.
How on earth can one just think of a poem and write it down?! I AM BAD!!
Nice one btw... :)
mmm, lucky to be in the rain! Its steaming hot here in Delhi!!!
Rain rain come again...
I'm in awe of people who can write poems; Wordsworth is the personal favourite..not to mention Robert Frost. Would love to quote from Frost:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep,
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep."
same here... :
Superb poetry.
WOW! Amazing stuff...
ur poem is utterly simple, yet carrying the meaning which has a lot of gravity attached to it. what i like about such poems is that they are accessible to ppl on qa much larger scale and still carry the needed msg :)
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