Thursday, March 16, 2006

Hamare baad mehfil mein andhera bahut ho jaayega
Bahut chirag jalaane padenge tumhe, roshni lautane ke liye
Khilenge phool fir bhi yoon hi, baagon mein har subah
Bahut mehnat karni padegi magar, unhe mehakna sikhane ke liye...

12 comments:

Samyak said...

har mehfil hai tere bina suni suni...
phoolon ki mahak ho tum bheeni bheeni...
sada yunhi hasate kheel kheelate rehanaa...
abhi to bahot baaki zindagi hai jeeni...!!!

Anonymous said...

I am not sure why but the things lost seem to carry more significance always ...as also false things like a MIRAGE... agar yeh panktiyaan aapne suni hogi

"Bare Shauk se sun raha tha jamaana,

Tumhi so gaye daastaan kehte kehte" ...

Or

"Yeh ardhsatya ab mujhko mujhse , kahin door le jaayega,

Ik chote se sach se maanav, tu jeevan mein kya paayega"

Also reminds of all the broken relationships , relationships that started but somewhere in the middle lost their fizz and may be something more ...

I have been very regular at your blogs ....I must say I like them ... Keep up the good work!!!

Shailabh

Kon ?? said...

very well said :)

Chitra said...

Very touching !

Himadri said...

[Phoenix]I dunno whether this is in response to Arnav's latest post , but for whatever sake it is, I'm flattered! Is it an original?

Abhieshek said...

It doesn't squall when one of the faces in a play called world is lost. The roles are replaced, the characters are substituted but the show goes on, with the same old essence; with the same old delight!

Abhieshek

Anonymous said...

Here's a counter ...

Maine koshish to ki bahut, ki badalun ye silsila,
ruk jaayegi duniya kahin, mujhko manane ke liye ?
meri zulfon sa vo kaajal kahin, aasun mein dhul gayaa,
to kya jal jaayegi raatein bhi, syah kahaane ke liye ?
tune hanskar kahin, pathar se jigar cheer jo diyaa,
dhadkan kahin ruk jaayegi, saasein bachaane ke liye ?
Tu jo kehta tha, meri nafz mein behta hai aabshaar,
nasl paani ki kya badlegi, khoo kahaane ke liye ?
kaisa afsos... bina maut ke pehchaan gum gayi,
Tune baaki hi kya rakha hai, ab bataane ke liye ?

Voice said...

>>Hamare baad mehfil mein andhera bahut ho jaayega

kyu tum tubelight ho? ;)

just kidd(O)ing

desperado said...

beautfiul lines

Anonymous said...

Thanx god ! you have not logged in yet.
Please do not accept any of these two comments of mine, for, the first one was a grossly synthetic and artificial eight liner which has no meaning in itself, and was written just because it was to be written, and hence it makes me feel ashamed.
Hope you'll agree, Thank you

Phoenix said...

[seige]
Beautifully put. Thank you:)

[shailabh]
Thanx for the comment.
I know the first verse but not the second. Beautiful lines nevertheless.
Yes you are right, we often realise the true worth of things when we lose them. Woh gaana hai na..

Na jaane kyon
Hota hai ye zindagi ke sath. Achanak ye man,
kisi ke jaane ke baad
kare fir uski yaad,
chhoti chhoti si baat.


The lines i wrote have several interpretations depending on the reader. Just like poetry itself..

[kon ??, chitra, desperado]
Thank you.

[himadri]
Nahi, not a response. but haan arnav's post did make me think.
anyway thank you. original it is.

[abhieshek]
sometimes, with some people, for somebody's personal world, it does squall!

[voice]
lolzz...kiddoing ka haq sirf mera hai, but aj apko maaf kiya:D

[hemu]
oye original hai. i dont tepofy.

[musafir]
The lines you wrote are pure magic. That';s why I did not listen to your request and published them. they're so bful i dotn even want to reply to thm now, because it wd only be embarrassing to me. and i published ur second comment because it epitomises ur modesty and humility.

Bows to the master...

GrasshopperBoy said...

very nice =D>